THE 100-WORD SPRINT: Round 2

I love my flash fiction, and so I've decided to enter round 2 of the challenge over at J.C. Martin's place. For more details, go here.

Remember:

  1. Your story must be 100 words (not including title and prompt) — no more, no less.
  2. Post your story on your blog and enter the link in the Linky provided.
  3. Entrants from previous heats are free to enter again.
  4. Every weekend, all completed entries will be put up to the public vote. Voting ends Sunday 11.59 GMT.

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        THE PROMPT

                               "The water barely rippled as she entered…”

Drops of water glistened as they rose into the air, arched their tails in the back flip position, then slipped under the water, five graceful water gymnasts, bodies in perfect symmetry, in tune with the flow of their surroundings.

The morning rays showcased irridescent bodies, fragile scales molded together, which shimmered like hundreds of precious stones.

Their ritualistic dance of slipping and slicing through the water to the sounds of music that lived in their hearts and souls, undetected by the human ear, was as ancient as time itself…

The lone spectator walked away. He had to let her go.

35 Comments

  1. shelly on August 9, 2012 at 10:49 am

    This was beautiful as usual.
    Hugs,
    Shelly
     

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:46 pm

      Thanks Shelly! 🙂

  2. Alex J. Cavanaugh on August 9, 2012 at 11:27 am

    He loved a mermaid then?

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:46 pm

      …well, I guess so… at least he's smart enough to realise that he must let go…

  3. Carol Kilgore on August 9, 2012 at 3:20 pm

    Pure poetry 🙂

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:47 pm

      Thanks Carol! 🙂

  4. jabblog uk. on August 9, 2012 at 4:53 pm

    The synchronised swimming has been wonderful, hasn't it? You've captured it beautifully.

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:48 pm

      The water events have been wonderful! Especially when our homegrown boy beat Phelps!

  5. Tonja on August 9, 2012 at 7:15 pm

    Pretty.  Loved the alliteration.

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:48 pm

      Thanks Tonja!

  6. sue on August 9, 2012 at 7:47 pm

    Thanks for the lovely comment. This was very visual. I originally was going to do a mermaid piece also 😀

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:49 pm

      The prompt lent itself to a mermaid tale! 🙂 Thanks Sue.

  7. Jocelyn Rish on August 9, 2012 at 10:09 pm

    Like so many of your stories, I can practically hear the music playing in the background.

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:50 pm

      That's a great compliment, Jocelyn! Thank you! 🙂

  8. The Golden Eagle on August 9, 2012 at 11:33 pm

    Oh, how sad. I love your descriptions, though!

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:50 pm

      Thanks G.E.  🙂

  9. Cheryl on August 10, 2012 at 2:41 pm

    Love the imagery–makes me want to know more…what happens next?
    Bless you!

    • michelle on August 10, 2012 at 2:51 pm

      I'm glad you liked the imagery, Cheryl! Bless you too! 🙂

  10. Emily R. King on August 10, 2012 at 4:27 pm

    Achingly beautiful! Well done.

    • michelle on August 11, 2012 at 7:49 am

      Thank you Emily!

  11. Sherry Ellis on August 10, 2012 at 8:00 pm

    Very beautiful!  Was this inspired by the olympics (synchronized swimming)? 

    • michelle on August 11, 2012 at 7:50 am

      That did cross my mind… 🙂

  12. Medeia Sharif on August 11, 2012 at 12:02 am

    Gorgeous writing! 🙂
     
    Have a great weekend.

    • michelle on August 11, 2012 at 7:51 am

      Thanks Medeia! 🙂

  13. Shannon Lawrence on August 11, 2012 at 5:35 am

    What a gorgeous description!  Great piece of flash.

  14. michelle on August 11, 2012 at 7:51 am

    Thanks Shannon. 🙂

  15. Rachna Chhabria on August 11, 2012 at 5:51 pm

    Michelle, this was outstanding, fluid, graceful and elegant, like the gymnasts 🙂

  16. michelle on August 12, 2012 at 10:05 pm

    What a wonderful analogy! Thanks for the lovely compliment, Rachna! 🙂

  17. Cecilia Robert on August 13, 2012 at 12:28 pm

    wow! beautiful at the same time sad. (The last line) I think you captured the man's emotions very well.

  18. michelle on August 13, 2012 at 1:05 pm

    Thanks for the visit Cecilia!

  19. Wayne Assiratti on August 14, 2012 at 12:47 pm

    Is this the alternative ending to the movie Splash? 😉
    Only kidding! I really liked this one. Very evocative.
    W.

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 8:22 pm

      Is that the movie with Darryl Hannah? Or Bo Derek? Or am I wrong on both counts… sorry, I'm "movie-challenged" 🙁 

      • Wayne Assiratti on August 14, 2012 at 9:46 pm

        Yep, its the one with Daryl Hannah and Tom Hanks. If you haven't seen it, you aren't missing much! 

  20. Nutschell on August 22, 2012 at 6:20 pm

    lovely piece. Falling in love with a mermaid is never a good idea. Smart guy. 🙂
     
    Nutschell
    http://www.thewritingnut.com

  21. michelle on August 23, 2012 at 10:29 am

    Thanks Nutschell. Yep, you're so right, it's destined to end in heartbreak… 🙂

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