CAMPAIGN CHALLENGE ~ NO.#1

Here is the first challenge for the Writers' Platform Building Campaign hosted by Rachael Harrie .

 Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less , excluding the title . It can be in any format , including a poem . Begin the story with the words , "The door swung open ". These four words will be included in the word count .

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words :"the door swung shut". (also included in the word count)

For those who want an even greater challenge , make your story 200 words EXACTLY !

So I've decided to accept all the "added extras" – here is my 200 word piece beginning and ending with the given words !

The door swung open . It was time . I stepped into the cavernous depths of the empty room .

Fragments of countless conversations flooded my mind .

"Give up the ghost ! Let go ! Move forward !" I had grown tired of hearing it . Like a scratched long-playing record , the needle stuck in one groove . I called them my vinyl moments .

"And let the past years go to waste ? You've gotta be kidding  ! After all my hard work … month in and month out …"

"It's destined to end in heartache !" I wondered what possible heartache could still be in store . She may as well have been speaking a foreign language . It was futile .

"But I'm so close . Within forty eight hours 'the truth' will be revealed ." That thought was lodged in my brain . But what is truth anyway ? Especially after twenty odd years ? Events become blurred . Memory rendered unreliable .

I should have left well alone . As the saying goes "let sleeping dogs lie". Instead , I pursued it. I probed and pushed – even punished myself – had to disturb the sleeping dog and , instead of the pampered poodle of my deluded imagination , I unleashed a ferocious , raving pitbull !

I faced my nemesis . Behind me , the door swung shut .

58 Comments

  1. Alleged Author on September 5, 2011 at 6:54 pm

    You had to end it there??? Waaaaah!

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 2:40 pm

      Sorrreee … 🙂 remember the 200-word limit ? Exactly !

  2. jane@flightplatformliving on September 5, 2011 at 7:17 pm

    want toknow more now! hi from a fellow campaigner. Number 62 in the list.

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 2:41 pm

      … and so do I Jane … and so do I LOL !

  3. bridgetstraub.com on September 5, 2011 at 9:50 pm

    I like it. This is so cool how no two are alike. I'm #72

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 2:42 pm

      It’s amazing how many different pieces are generated from the same prompt ….

  4. 1000th.monkey on September 6, 2011 at 5:53 am

    Ha, I think we all have a few *vinal moments* 😉

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 2:44 pm

      You probably right … just with a different name , but the same thing … 🙂

  5. JamieDedes on September 6, 2011 at 2:47 pm

    Whoa! Totally drew me in and I want more, more, more …
    Rose nicely to the challenge, Mish…and I loved the "sleeping dog" vs. the "pampered poodle" thing. 

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 3:43 pm

      Thanks Jamie … life is funny , and the ‘truth’ is not always what you want it to be … 🙂

  6. Amy LaBonte on September 6, 2011 at 5:51 pm

    Hi! So I'm wondering… How does it end? Who or what is the pitbull? Curious readers would like to know.

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 10:10 pm

      The 200 word limit prevented me from making that discovery … 🙂

  7. tara tyler on September 6, 2011 at 10:52 pm

    so mysterious! and adamant!
    tell us what happens!
    great job, mish =)

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 11:09 pm

      Thanks Tara … wish I could … but I can’t … not at this stage , anyway !

  8. Miranda Hardy on September 6, 2011 at 11:07 pm

    Very nicely done! I love the ending, her facing her nemesis.

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 11:12 pm

      Thanks for poppng in ! 🙂

  9. Angela Orlowski-Peart on September 6, 2011 at 11:07 pm

    You completely drew me in. Now I want to know what that "truth" was!
    Thanks for commenting on my entry 🙂 Looking forward to the next assignment! 

    • mish on September 6, 2011 at 11:10 pm

      So happy you were drawn into the piece 🙂 We will meet up again in the next task !

  10. Jes on September 7, 2011 at 12:25 am

    "Vinyl moments"–great phrase, that. Fantastic take on the prompt!

    • mish on September 7, 2011 at 11:08 am

      Thanks so much Jes !

  11. Jessica on September 7, 2011 at 1:01 pm

    Oh my gosh that's awesome! I wish you had written more!! And thanks for stopping by my blog! It's nice to meet you 🙂

  12. Fairview on September 7, 2011 at 2:31 pm

    nice. a strong voice for a strong heroine!

  13. kineticwriting on September 7, 2011 at 3:58 pm

    Thanks! it is amazing how different the stories are. I really enjoyed it. 🙂

  14. Balin on September 7, 2011 at 5:47 pm

    Mish, thanks for the comments on my entry. Thought I would jump over and read yours before digging in to the others. What a great surprise! I love the voice and the pace. I would definitely keep reading. 

  15. Thomas on September 7, 2011 at 11:14 pm

    Really enjoyed your piece! Loved the overall metaphor — facing demons. Way cool! Thanks for also putting your number in your comment on piece, Helps with tracking a bit. T #234

  16. Kathy McKendry on September 7, 2011 at 11:40 pm

    I love your "vinyl moments" line.  So descriptive.  Great post!  Thanks for stopping by mine!

  17. Niiganab on September 8, 2011 at 1:29 am

    I like this.  It's one I'd like to know more about.  "Raging pitbull" brought some vivid images to me.

  18. Nellie on September 8, 2011 at 1:31 am

    But. noooo, that can't be the end of it???

  19. Holly L'Oiseau on September 8, 2011 at 2:42 am

    I love the tension!

  20. Susan on September 8, 2011 at 5:32 pm

    What a teaser! I want to read more. I love the long-playing record and vinyl moments metaphor. Very nice flash fiction, I must say.
    Thanks for the visit to my blog, as well 🙂 Happy Campaigning!

    • mish on September 8, 2011 at 6:06 pm

      A big thank you to all my fellow campaigners who popped in to read my contribution and leave a comment ! I appreciate each and every one . 🙂 🙂

  21. S. L. Hennessy on September 8, 2011 at 8:08 pm

    Wow, great story! I love that you managed all three "extra challenges"! (I did that too!! – check it out #262) Can't wait to hear more from you 🙂
     

  22. Jess Byam on September 9, 2011 at 1:03 am

    Ooo, very interesting! I like how she got herself into the mess by pursuing the truth. 😉

  23. Samantha on September 9, 2011 at 1:03 am

    Wow! You really have me curious! Thanks for sharing this 🙂
     
    Samantha
    <a href="http://writingthroughcollege.blogspot.com">Writing Through College</a> 

  24. Christine Rains on September 9, 2011 at 1:25 am

    Oh, that was cool. Nice descriptions and great tension.

  25. Crystal Collier on September 9, 2011 at 2:27 am

    "vinyl moments" Hee hee. <3 Nicely done. 

  26. Doreen on September 9, 2011 at 2:36 am

    Nicely done…I wanted to read more…

  27. Elaine Charton on September 9, 2011 at 3:49 am

    I like this!  Makes me want to read more.

  28. Rachel Morgan on September 9, 2011 at 7:09 am

    I love how so many completely different stories can come from one prompt!
    Like a scratched long-playing record, the needle stuck in one groove. I called them my vinyl moments.
    I like that image 🙂

    • mish on September 9, 2011 at 8:36 am

      Thank you to all my fellow campaigners for popping in and leaving such wonderful comments ! I appreciate each and every one of them ! 🙂 🙂 What an amazing online support structure ! You guys ROCK !!! 🙂 🙂

  29. mooderino on September 9, 2011 at 9:51 am

    Nice build up. Just as things are about to explode.
     
    mood

    • Roy Station on September 9, 2011 at 12:09 pm

      Leaves me with a feeling of curious anticipation. I think opinion demands you will have to write more of this, very well done.

  30. CherylAnne Ham on September 9, 2011 at 2:08 pm

    Interesting twist at the end. Congrats on meeting those extra challenges, too.  😀

  31. BucksWriter on September 9, 2011 at 2:40 pm

    Intriguing piece!
    Hi Mish, just paying you a return campaign visit and waving from the UK.
    Loved your profile 🙂
    Claire

  32. Heather McCorkle on September 9, 2011 at 3:20 pm

    This peaked my curiosity and left me wanting to read more. Great job!

  33. MC Rogerson on September 9, 2011 at 4:58 pm

    Who is she about to face? An fascinating piece that left me asking lots of questions! Great work!

  34. Sara on September 9, 2011 at 6:23 pm

    Thank you so much for ending it right there! Your use of imagery was well-done! 
    Thanks for stopping by my blog! 

  35. Shelley Koon on September 9, 2011 at 6:51 pm

    "Like a scratched long-playing record , the needle stuck in one groove"
    What an awesome line!  Great suspense 😉

  36. Leah on September 10, 2011 at 5:19 am

    I'm with Shelley (Hi Shelley!), I actually really enjoyed that line as well. Well done. =)

  37. Morning on September 11, 2011 at 12:08 am

    very haunting piece. glad to see you push forward with courage.

    • mish on September 11, 2011 at 8:56 am

      Thanks once again for all the wonderful comments ! 🙂 🙂

  38. Elaine on September 11, 2011 at 9:40 am

    In your scene you've opened the door on a world you have created 😉
    I was drawn into the ghost story and would love to know more.
    I'm with everyone else – loved the poodle to pitbull imagery.
    Good luck with the challenge.

  39. deniz on September 11, 2011 at 8:47 pm

    And then what happened? Love the vinyl moments line!

  40. Daina on September 11, 2011 at 9:28 pm

    Darn 200 words limit! Now we'll never know what happens next!

  41. K.T. Hanna on September 12, 2011 at 6:54 pm

    Proof that pursuing the truth isn't always the best way to go 😉 Would love to know more about this. Well written.

  42. Arlee Bird on September 13, 2011 at 4:39 am

    A raving pitbull is not to be messed with!
     
    Lee
    <a href="http://tossingitout.blogspot.com/">Tossing It Out</a>
     
     

  43. Karenof4 on September 13, 2011 at 5:32 am

    Yea, I like your term "Vinal Moments." 🙂 Ravinous pit bull certainly grabbed me after talking about letting sleeping dogs lie.  

    • mish on September 13, 2011 at 6:39 am

      Thank you ! Thank you ! Thank you for all the comments ! 🙂

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