Five Sentence Fiction #7 – FAERIES

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week the hostess will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

                                                        

Seated upon a ragwort, a pretty will-o'-the-wisp in shimmering garments with a hat of purple foxglove studied the little girl, and put a hand to her mouth in an attempt to stifle a giggle.

The world had transformed into a rainbow-coloured, multi-faceted chocolate wonderland, which oozed… dripped… poured… solidified…

Chelsea looked around in utter confusion.

"Welcome to ChoccyWoccyDoodah Land," the creature with the sing-song voice piped up," there's an abundance of chocolate to cater for your every fantasy, in every imaginable form, shape and size; but do not, under any circumstances, go near the birches, and the four-leafed clover is forbidden territory."

The last memory Chelsea had, was hiding from her mom and sneaking off to gorge the edible primrose florets which adorned the giant fairy chocolate cake, that was on display at the local bakery…

45 Comments

  1. Ryan Derham on June 23, 2012 at 6:44 pm

    Sounds like my kinda world, lol. Like those forbidden, and I’m sure tempting, places where she’s not to go. Very descriptive with an air of mystery, M!

    • michelle on June 23, 2012 at 7:13 pm

      Thanks R! So you're a lover of the decadent kinda worlds, are you…?

  2. Elise Fallson on June 23, 2012 at 7:00 pm

    I got hungry reading this! And I think this is the first time I've read something of yours written in a fantasy genre. I like it and loved your description of the will-o'-the-wisp. (:

    • michelle on June 23, 2012 at 7:23 pm

      LOL. You're obviously a chocaholic! 🙂 The fantasy genre is really stepping outside of my comfort zone… I don't think I'm very good at it and always imagine that it comes across as clumsy or forced…? I don't know much about faeries either. But I'm keen to learn new things and definitely want to improve on my writing, and how will I achieve that if I'm close-minded and not willing to think "out-of-the-box"?

      • injaynesworld on June 23, 2012 at 7:27 pm

        "Thinking out of the box" is my great challenge, too.   I love this gooey-yummy piece.  Why do I have the feeling that Chelsea will not be able to resist the birches or four-leaf clovers?  😉

        • michelle on June 23, 2012 at 7:39 pm

          Gooey-yummy? *chuckles* I didn't have a clue what to do with this prompt… Faeries/fantasy is NOT my strong point! And if she goes for the birches/four-leaf clovers, then she'll have to accept the consequences of those actions… 🙂

  3. CC on June 23, 2012 at 7:37 pm

    Ooo.  I kind of wish I liked chocolate a little more because this place sounds very fun.  Nicely done. 🙂

    • michelle on June 23, 2012 at 8:47 pm

      Thanks for the visit CC! Surprisingly, I'm not a chocolate-lover either… 🙂

  4. Angela on June 23, 2012 at 8:38 pm

    I love sharply-spun circular tales, where the ending is really the beginning – and the shorter the tale, the harder it is to pull off. And you did it in 5 sentences?!? Girl, you rock. Nice work!

    • Angela on June 23, 2012 at 8:39 pm

      PS Found you through the FSF lineup. Glad to find another writer-ly soul!

      • michelle on June 23, 2012 at 8:53 pm

        I'm so happy to meet you, Angela! *waves* I loved your combination of prose/poetry for this prompt… and thank you for the kind comment – I didn't plan the piece as a circular tale, it just unfolded in this manner…

  5. Shelly on June 23, 2012 at 11:45 pm

    I love chocolate and fairies. Nice piece as always.

    • michelle on June 24, 2012 at 8:13 am

      I'm sending hugs and virtual chocolate bars your way———- Whoosh————*and off they go flying across the blogiverse*

  6. JB Lacaden on June 24, 2012 at 12:07 am

    I like it. It's a fun story. Nice writing Michelle. 🙂

    • michelle on June 24, 2012 at 8:13 am

      Thank you for the visit and comment, JB. 🙂

  7. Victoria on June 24, 2012 at 12:33 am

    Mish, this is so good. I just love your descriptions and the fun story-line. You drew me right into that world.

    • michelle on June 24, 2012 at 10:16 pm

      Thank you Victoria! I'm glad you were in the moment…

  8. Sherry Ellis on June 24, 2012 at 1:06 am

    Choccywoccydoodah land?  That's a great name!  Sounds like my kind of place!

    • michelle on June 24, 2012 at 10:18 pm

      *chuckles* ChoccyWoccyDoodah Land is the inspiration for this piece! I started off with the word, and built the story around it… I couldn't resist using it! It's such a fun name… 🙂

  9. Lora on June 24, 2012 at 7:37 am

    This is a fun piece with a surprise ending. Hope the cake baker didn't catch her destroying his masterpiece. Nice work.

    • michelle on June 24, 2012 at 10:20 pm

      Once she was transported to ChoccyWoccyDoodah Land, it didn't really matter… 🙂 Thanks Lora!

  10. Alex J. Cavanaugh on June 24, 2012 at 5:05 pm

    Very clever, Michelle. And I'll remember not to sneak any frosting from faerie cakes.

    • michelle on June 24, 2012 at 10:23 pm

      Thanks Alex! I was under pressure when I saw the prompt…. faeries/fantasy is not one of my strengths. I even contemplated passing on this one, but then realised that I have to try new/different things… 

  11. JTsuruoka on June 25, 2012 at 4:28 am

    A chocolate wonderland…. when can I move in?  😉

    • michelle on June 25, 2012 at 1:57 pm

      You'll have to join the queue… and let me warn you, it's  long and winding… :)… actually stretches around the bend and continues for three blocks…

  12. tara tyler on June 25, 2012 at 11:53 am

    cah-razy good!
    how fun!! great job creating a fantasy world with danger!

  13. michelle on June 25, 2012 at 1:59 pm

    Thanks TTT!  *grin from ear to ear*

  14. Carolyn Brown on June 26, 2012 at 10:44 pm

    What a wonderful world to explore! Great entry!
     
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    • michelle on July 1, 2012 at 10:03 am

      Thanks Carolyn… it's every chocoholic's dream world… 🙂

  15. Bullish on June 27, 2012 at 4:57 am

    Egads!! I knew ChoccyWoccydoodah Land was real!! Truly wonderful read!! 🙂 

    • michelle on July 1, 2012 at 10:04 am

      Ms. Bullish, coming from you, that's made my day!! *does the happy dance*

  16. Rachna Chhabria on June 27, 2012 at 4:57 pm

    Super, Michelle. I liked reading this a lot. The picture is awesome 🙂

    • michelle on July 1, 2012 at 10:05 am

      Thanks for the lovely comment, Rachna! 🙂

  17. Brian on June 28, 2012 at 12:37 am

    Ha – great descriptions "oozed….dripped….poured….solidified" — very visceral. Of course, we all know Chelsea is going right for the birches…

    • michelle on July 1, 2012 at 10:11 am

      Ha! You're so right, Brian….  never tell a child what he/she shouldn't do… it simply stirs his/her curiosity!

  18. Lillie McFerrin on June 28, 2012 at 1:13 am

    Oh, to be part of that world 🙂 Nice job!!!

    • michelle on July 1, 2012 at 10:13 am

      Is that the voice of a chocolate-lover that I hear? LOL! Thanks for the visit! 🙂

  19. Rekha on June 28, 2012 at 8:16 am

    Super chocolicious and yes, too much of the chocolate world with tiny fairies in it can be dangerous to the heart and mind. 🙂

    • michelle on July 1, 2012 at 10:14 am

      Ah Rekha, you of all people would know about it… much more than I do… 🙂

  20. Stephanie on July 1, 2012 at 12:00 am

    I used to be (and by "used to be", I mean "still am") mesmerized by the whole edible-candy-chocolate-world thing.  Even the gingerbread house seemed like it might almost be a fair trade.  I like the ending of this one!

    • michelle on July 1, 2012 at 10:15 am

      Thanks Stephanie! It's nice to hear from you… maybe you could design some faerie clay-people for a future post…?

  21. Susan Kane on July 2, 2012 at 9:31 pm

    Oooh…someone(s) will be mighty unhappy shortly!

  22. michelle on July 2, 2012 at 10:36 pm

    … unhappy? Mmmm…  I wonder who that "someone" might be…?

  23. Jo-Anne Teal on July 5, 2012 at 4:09 am

    Hi Michelle, I just found your comment on my Fairy/faerie story.  Strangely it was in my spam filter and since I'm just getting used to WP, I never thought to check that darn file.  Anyway, your story!
    A lovely, magical, delicate childhood lesson – really really enjoyed! 

  24. michelle on July 5, 2012 at 11:18 am

    Thanks Jo-Anne! I've noticed that a few other comments on FSF fellow bloggers sites have been swallowed by spammer. Thanks for the visit and generous comment!

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