Five Sentence Fiction #12 – NIGHT

by Michelle Wallace on August 18, 2012

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week the hostess will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

Giabella pirouetted on fishnet-stockinged stiletto heels, to gaze at the scantily-clad mirror image.

Satisfied, she applied her favourite shade of ruby lipstick, checked her wristwatch and lifted a silver clutch purse from the hallway table, en-route to the front door.

Childhood-induced terrors, that even the Eminent Doctor had failed to fix, flooded her mind, as she completed the ritual.

She melted into the inky darkness.

It held new terrors for her, but SHE was in control now!

{ 29 comments… read them below or add one }

Shelly August 18, 2012 at 10:59 am

Another bestselling piece, my dear!
Hugs and chocolate,
Shelly

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Medeia Sharif August 18, 2012 at 12:26 pm

I felt both her terror and control. Fantastic piece.

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Alex J. Cavanaugh August 18, 2012 at 1:48 pm

Sounds like she' the on who causes the terrors now!

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Sandra Crook August 18, 2012 at 4:07 pm

Not sure what she's got on her mind but it sounds like trouble for someone.  Nicely menacing.

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Ryan Derham August 18, 2012 at 5:45 pm

I’d definitely like to know more about her and her plans for the night. Well done showing her determination to overcome her lingering fear of it!

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Susan Kane August 18, 2012 at 6:33 pm

Giabella sounds like she is one dangerous, don't-mess-with-me, lady.

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injaynesworld August 18, 2012 at 7:27 pm

Wow.  Very well-drawn character.    I completely understood the demons that drove her to this need for this type of control.   Excellent piece.  

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Julie August 19, 2012 at 3:18 am

Remind me never to get on your bad side! You certainly know a thing or two about very dangerous women!  Very impressive!

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Carol Kilgore August 19, 2012 at 3:01 pm

Sets the stage nicely. Good job!

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Elise Fallson August 19, 2012 at 3:10 pm

In control and on the go! Sounds like she if finally going to have a night to remember. Great piece Mich, I could picture her perfectly. (;

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Wayne Assiratti August 19, 2012 at 5:59 pm

Loved that. Great stuff as usual!
Cheers, 
W. 

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Jocelyn Rish August 19, 2012 at 9:56 pm

What a funky looking prompt and what a great take on it!

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tara tyler August 20, 2012 at 12:30 pm

go night woman!
great piece!

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Sherry Ellis August 20, 2012 at 1:29 pm

I want to know what she's up to.  Now you have to write the rest of the story! 

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Emily R. King August 20, 2012 at 7:18 pm

This was a sexy piece. It lured me right in!

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J.L. Campbell August 20, 2012 at 8:37 pm

You should publish these. As always, you never cease to amaze me with a big story in a small number of words.

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L. Diane Wolfe August 21, 2012 at 1:37 am

Don't mess with her now.

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Lynda R Young August 21, 2012 at 7:50 am

oh fantastic. Love it.

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Andy Black August 21, 2012 at 12:07 pm

Are we talking Dominatrix here?…

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Nick Wilford August 21, 2012 at 12:20 pm

I like it. Very evocative, and strong characterisation in those few lines.

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Leigh Covington August 21, 2012 at 3:26 pm

AWESOME!!!!
I love it!

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michelle August 21, 2012 at 6:51 pm

THANKS TO EVERYONE WHO POPPED IN AND LEFT A COMMENT ON MY BLOG. I REALLY APPRECIATE IT. I NORMALLY RESPOND TO EVERY INDIVIDUAL COMMENT, BUT I'VE BEEN QUITE BUSY AS OF LATE…

YOU GUYS ROCK!! :) :) :)

(((HUGS)))

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Britton Minor August 22, 2012 at 1:20 pm

I amaylaays fascinated by the ways we take control after unmanageable pain or anguish has gripped our lives. 

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Britton Minor August 22, 2012 at 1:21 pm

Criminy…that should have been, " I am always…"

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Rachna Chhabria August 22, 2012 at 3:27 pm

Wondering what terrors the inky darkness holds for her….. I am super curious Michelle. As usual great lines :)

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Mina B. August 22, 2012 at 7:24 pm

Oooh.  That was good.  I want to read more.  Come on!

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michelle August 23, 2012 at 10:31 am

Thanks guys! :)

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Leslie Rose August 27, 2012 at 1:32 am

What a fab image. Consider me hooked – no pun intended.

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nutschell September 12, 2012 at 6:32 pm

Nice! She sounds like one fierce lady :)
 
Nutschell
http://www.thewritingnut.com

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