Razor Sharp…

Razor sharp and cold as ice… the deceptive exterior was a clinical detachment which belied a mental strength and unparalleled business acumen. A man of decision, with the ability to make a snap judgement, involving life and death, while calmly sipping a lemon iced tea.

Beneath the frosty exterior, was a fiery adversary, whose emotions were kept under tight control by the polished veneer of professionalism.

He was the consummate professional. A smooth study in efficiency and respectability. It gleamed and shone, manifested itself in various ways, including the dress code, smart casual lightweight linen pants with matching jacket thrown over his arm, nonchalant and disarming. Like nothing bothered him.

Somebody who exuded that aura of knowing something that others were unaware of. Somebody who knew what he was doing. Knew where he was going to. Knew exactly how to get there. Always sure of himself. Always unruffled. You did not have to like the man. But you could not ignore his presence.

It was also in his modus operandi. The well-oiled machinery of his business empire was a study in business strategy and takeovers. Business Management 101.

His corporate tentacles stretched far and wide, a living, breathing, moving entity… lurking… preying on unsuspecting victims… pouncing when the moment was right. Over the years they had ensnared smaller businesses and firms. The power was felt along the corporate corridors. Very few were out of his reach.

Razor sharp and cold as ice… that was the word on the street…

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This is a 247-word fiction piece in response to a continuation writing prompt over at WordInSync. Go there and check out the various prompts for The Storyteller Linky Challenge No.#4



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  1. Shah Wharton on November 17, 2011 at 7:18 am

    What a marvelous response to the prompt. I love to see what others do with my propmpts. This guy and this peice reminded me of Jack Bateman from American Psycho (Brillient read/movie). I saw this guy and his attitude clearly. Really well doen. Thanks for taking th time and linking up. Really loved this. Shah. 

    • mish on November 18, 2011 at 8:31 am

      I’ve never seen the movie or read the book. The prompt led to the creation of this character. Now he’s lurking…

  2. The Drama Mama on November 17, 2011 at 3:47 pm

    What a powerful character sketch you've given us here. I can see him clearly. He's definitely formidable. I wonder, though, what is his weakness and who's going to exploit it. So many different directions you could take this, should you choose to write more. Fabulous writing, even if you did use professional/professionalism back to back with a little redundency. 😉 Can I have more please?

    • mish on November 18, 2011 at 8:33 am

      Thank you for the concrit. You hit the nail on the head by speculating about his weakness(es), because that train of thought had crossed my mind while creating this character. 🙂

  3. Li @Flash Fiction on November 17, 2011 at 5:08 pm

    Well executed – sounds like a man who might be a sociopath (or just an astute businessman). Nice to meet you, I tried to hook up via GoogleConnect but didn't let me this time, will try again later 🙂

    • mish on November 18, 2011 at 8:35 am

      Thanks Li… sociopath versus astute businessman? I’ll have to don my thinking cap… 🙂

  4. The Golden Eagle on November 18, 2011 at 11:33 pm

    He sounds like an imposing figure!
    Great description.

    • mish on November 19, 2011 at 4:48 pm

      Glad you think so. Thanks for visiting!

  5. Stacy S. Jensen on November 19, 2011 at 7:07 pm

    The corporate corridors are tought. I reading the prompts and the end result. 

    • mish on November 19, 2011 at 7:16 pm

      Thanks for popping in, Stacy.

  6. Shelly on November 22, 2011 at 6:56 pm

    Sorry, I didn't read this sooner. I'm overwhelmed lately. You wrote another wonderful piece. Have a Happy Thanksgiving!!!

    • mish on November 22, 2011 at 7:39 pm

      Not a problem Shelly. Take it easy and don’t overwork yourself!

  7. nutschell on December 21, 2011 at 7:39 pm

    "You did not have to like the man but you could not ignore his presence." Love that line! well done!
    Have a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!

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