It was a day like any other day. Bright. Fresh. Promising.

It was a letter like any other letter. Standard. Manila. Window envelope.

It was a moment like countless others that had gone before… was it the electricity bill which was always a week late? Another letter of demand from the ongoing mess of a hire purchase contract gone sour? Yet another loan company enticing the average-income breadwinner with the oh-so-tempting sixty month payback deal?

One common thread fed the rumour mill.

Nobody could pry the crumpled sheet from her tightly-clenched fist, as they escorted the blank-eyed, zombie-like figure out of the house…

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  1. Ryan Derham on June 4, 2012 at 9:11 pm

    Lol You really had me guessing with this one, M! This has a clever and witty build up to an unexpected and intriguing ending.
    Really enjoyed it!
    p.s. I’m thinking about part two of mine. 😉

    • michelle on June 6, 2012 at 10:42 am

      I'll swing by one of the days, to check out your part 2… 🙂

  2. Alex J. Cavanaugh on June 4, 2012 at 9:43 pm

    A pictured a writer getting a contract but then it went south!

    • michelle on June 6, 2012 at 10:44 am

      It did cross my mind, but I decided against it because I knew lots of readers would have thought about it too…

  3. Elise Fallson on June 4, 2012 at 10:10 pm

    Oh my, what an opening! What is on the crumpled sheet! It's something terrible of course and already I feel for this poor woman.  Also, I really liked your first two opening lines, beautifully done. (:

    • michelle on June 6, 2012 at 10:50 am

      Something terrible enough to induce a near-catatonic state… thanks Elise!

  4. The Golden Eagle on June 4, 2012 at 10:20 pm

    From the ordinary to the extraordinary! I love the way you built up to it.

    • michelle on June 6, 2012 at 10:52 am

      What a lovely way to put it G.E. I wouldn't have thought of it in terms of "ordinary to the extraordinary"… thanks for the compliment!

  5. Teresa on June 5, 2012 at 8:36 pm

    Sometimes we just need to let the crumpled papers fall to the floor? Love it.

    • michelle on June 6, 2012 at 10:55 am

      Yes… just let go… holding on will not solve the problem… thanks.

  6. Sherry Ellis on June 5, 2012 at 9:28 pm

    That was quite a build-up!  I wasn't expecting the tightly clenched, crumpled paper.  Excellent writing!

    • michelle on June 6, 2012 at 10:55 am

      Ah, glad you were caught by surprise at the end… thank you Sherry!

  7. Susan Kane on June 6, 2012 at 12:53 am

    You really caught me with this one.  The clutched paper.  The zombie eyes.  Super.


    • michelle on June 6, 2012 at 10:58 am

      *smiles*  It worked. You were caught unawares. My job is done! Thank you Susan.

  8. Lynda R Young on June 7, 2012 at 11:21 pm

    Ha, I love this and the reaction to the letter.

  9. michelle on June 8, 2012 at 11:47 am

    Thank you Linda! Glad you enjoyed it. 🙂

  10. Ryan Derham on June 11, 2012 at 2:46 pm

    Hey M! Hope this posts. Stand by…

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