DRABBLE CHALLENGE ~ SILENCE

The drabble is a weekly challenge hosted by Aheila on her blog : http://thewriteaholicblog.wordpress.com A reminder how it works : read the prompt and find your angle ; write a drabble (100 word story , give or take 5 words) ; post a direct link to the drabble in your comments

                                                                

The silence is everywhere . It takes its place , settles in , complacent and comfortable … a loyal breakfast , lunch and dinner companion . It permeates the atmosphere – thick , multi-layered chunks filled with unimaginable pain , unspeakable truths .

"Daddy , why does mommy stare all the time ?"

"She is very sick …"

"Why won't mommy speak to us ? Can't she take medicine to make her better ?" No answer . Just silence .

No more family gatherings . The pitter patter of running feet , giggles and laughter , lost in a distant memory . Sshh … whisper …

Mr. Bear , do you think I ask too many questions ? Silence .

Well , daddy says so ....

Silence .

10 Comments

  1. Dana on July 27, 2011 at 9:34 pm

    This is heartbreakingly sad–and lovely. I really enjoyed your take on this prompt.

    • mish on July 28, 2011 at 8:32 am

      Thanks Dana , glad you enjoyed it !

  2. tara tyler on July 27, 2011 at 10:11 pm

    awww. that is so sad =(
    emotive writing!

    • mish on July 28, 2011 at 8:32 am

      Thanks Tara … it is quite sad , hey ?

  3. Victoria on July 28, 2011 at 2:47 am

    So sad. Beautiful writing.

    • mish on July 28, 2011 at 8:33 am

      Thank you Victoria ! I appreciate your words !

  4. Ryan on July 28, 2011 at 7:48 pm

    Really good, Mish! Profound and heartbreaking at the same time, and very realistic.

    • mish on July 28, 2011 at 8:28 pm

      Thanks Ryan … this happens in real life … sad , but true !

  5. booguloo on July 30, 2011 at 11:16 pm

    Depression, if that's what is happening here, can be a killer.  I hope Daddy gets the help Mommy needs for the daughter's sake.  This is a heartbraking situation for all involved.  Thanks for bringing up the hard things to write about.

    • mish on July 31, 2011 at 10:56 am

      Yes , depression bordering on catatonia is devastating for the entire family … and daddy feels helpless too … doesn’t know what to tell the little one . Thanks for your input . I really appreciate it .

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