Five Sentence Fiction #14 – AWKWARD
What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week the hostess will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
A spoon clatters to the ceramic-tiled kitchen floor, as two pairs of hands collide in a clumsy attempt to neaten dishevelled clothes and tuck errant wisps of tousled hair into place.
An interminable pause… filled only with the jarring sound of the clock, on guard above the microwave oven, which seems to tick even louder.
You wish you were anywhere else but staring at your sister in flagrante delicto – with your cousin's fiance!
A tiny spark of an idea flares, hidden behind a glaring and tight-lipped disapproval.
It would be foolish to ignore the perfect opportunity to turn a potentially volatile situation into a lucrative deal – and take Miss Sanctimonius down – once and for all!
Love it! Great fun read. In Flagante Delicto is just not used enough as far as I am concerned…
Well, it's probably not used enough because the phrase deals with a sensitive issue… 🙂
Great set up for the scene which you really bring to life. The opening sentence’s hints of something going on, leading to a scandalous picture of what’s taking place, make for a fun read. Well done, M!
Yes, scandalous and awkward… but then turned around to benefit the spectator! LOL.
Where's a camera where you need it? She'd be so busted.
That's a great idea… a camera to capture the "Kodak" moment. LOL.
Wow! Great story!
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Thanks Ann. 🙂
I love the setup here. It was completely unexpected!
Nothing better than the unexpected, guaranteed to stir up some deliciously wicked "payback" fun……
Great scene described here, full of action and expectation.
Thanks Madeleine. Action… expectation… and then the reader is left to use her imagination! 🙂
She is SO busted. Great story!
Yep! Caught in the act! No way to bluff yourself out of this one… thanks for the visit Sarah.
excellent scene of naughtiness! they always get caught! nice job!
There's two types of naughtiness… there's is the not-so-nice-type… 🙂
Superb! I must remember 'in flagrante delicto' – I've only used the shorter form before. Miss Sanctimonius in the kitchen should have taken more care . . . 😉
Probably thought that she'd never be found out… LOL…
Ha ha, you say so much in this short piece, we not only know what's been going on, but we are now well aware of the sibling rivalry and much of their sisterly relationship! Would love to know how she's going to dish out her payback!
All I can say is… revenge is sweet! 🙂
In French we spell it "flagrant délire", very similar and a nice touch in your piece.
You also have me wondering what the 'spark of an idea' could be. The possibilities are endless….mhahahahah! <==evil laugh*
Love your flash fic Mich, you're so good at these and this one is nicely executed as usual. (:
Thanks Elise! I tried to think of something different… then I remembered this phrase and thought that it would fit nicely into the piece! 🙂
Oh that is awkward!
Awkward… and a whole bunch of other things as well… 🙂
Oh boy, I'm almost sorry for poor Miss Sanctimonious, who's fallen far off the waggon. Good one, Michelle.
Ha! Her downfall becomes someone else'e benefit! 🙂
Loved reading it! So naughty!
Thanks Nas!
Awkward, but lucrative. This story sounds like it'll twist and turn in interesting ways.
Yes, it does have the potential to be full of surprises and twists… thanks Medeia.
A lovely piece of writing.
Nothing like turning an awkward moment around so that it favours you.
I think Miss Sanctimonius is in for a hard time.
When opportunity comes knocking… you've got to recognise it and seize the moment… thanks Mike.
Take the breaks as they arrive, I say. Great vindictive take on the prompt.
When the break arrives, take it, because you never know if another is coming your way in a hurry… 🙂
Ahhh… the warfare of siblings. And what perfect amunition…
Sibling rivalry… but it's about to get REAL nasty! 🙂
Ahhhh – sisterly love.
So to speak.
Cheers!
JzB
I see somebody beat me to the "Ahhh."
Darn!
JzB
"So to speak" LOL!
i have only one sister and am wondering if I could be as vindictive – possibly not, but I thinks thats a good thing! 🙂 Loved this and am curious to know what the sister has done.
You and your sister obviously enjoy a mutually satisfying relationship… that's definitely a good thing! Vindictiveness between siblings is not nice… it's actually a sad situation. Thanks for popping in and leaving a comment!
Ah, have to love a good opportunist 🙂 Great take on the prompt!!
Opportunity came knocking – and she seized it! 🙂