Five Sentence Fiction #6 – MEDICINE

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week the hostess will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

                                                       

She opted for the age-old remedy.

Emptying the contents into a glass, she lapsed into a semi absent-minded contemplation, swirled the liquid round and round, watched the powder dissolve…

It was a curative and restorative combination alright, designed to cure the nagging problem and restore sanity.

This was the panacea for all her ills.

A soft click of the door, and the spine-chilling drawl that haunted her every waking and sleeping moment, had the power to reduce her to a mass of quivering jelly, was delivered on cue: "Fix me a drink, would you darling, and make yourself comfortable…"

46 Comments

  1. mary aalgaard on June 14, 2012 at 8:41 pm

    Hmmm. A bit creepy.

    • michelle on June 14, 2012 at 8:49 pm

      Perfect response. Thanks Mary.

  2. tara tyler on June 14, 2012 at 9:08 pm

    that was superb!
    the opening to a murder!

    • michelle on June 14, 2012 at 9:21 pm

      Thanks TTT! I love your enthusiasm…  🙂

  3. The Golden Eagle on June 14, 2012 at 11:49 pm

    I get a sinking feeling after reading this . . .
     
    Powerful five sentences!

    • michelle on June 15, 2012 at 2:38 pm

      I'm glad you were affected in this way… thanks Golden Eagle!

  4. Elise Fallson on June 15, 2012 at 5:49 am

    I know this is creepy and all, but that actually got me all kinds of excited to read on.  At first I was afraid you where going to have her drink it…glad I was wrong!  

    • michelle on June 15, 2012 at 2:39 pm

      Oooh, I can feel your excitement, Elise! It's contagious… now you've got me all excited too!

  5. Jocelyn Rish on June 15, 2012 at 6:42 am

    Love it when jerks get what they deserve!

    • michelle on June 15, 2012 at 2:40 pm

      I SO agree with you! Down with the jerks!!

  6. Jenna Quentin on June 15, 2012 at 6:56 am

    Very clever and as said, creepy!

    • michelle on June 15, 2012 at 2:40 pm

      Thanks Jenna! I loved your magical take on the prompt… 🙂

  7. shelly on June 15, 2012 at 2:04 pm

    Well done.

    • michelle on June 15, 2012 at 2:41 pm

      Thanks Shelly. I've been thinking about you… hope you are well…

  8. Tara Eash (@EashTara) on June 16, 2012 at 4:24 am

    I have a morbid curiosity about the character behind the drawl that reduces her to jelly.  This keeps me on the edge waiting for more. . .

    • michelle on June 16, 2012 at 8:19 pm

      … well, on the edge and waiting for more is a good thing! Thanks for the visit, Tara 🙂

  9. Teresa Coltrin @Journaling Woman on June 16, 2012 at 12:22 pm

    I LIKE it. I love the mystery around it.

    • michelle on June 16, 2012 at 8:20 pm

      Ah, that makes me happy! Thanks Teresa.

  10. Elise Fallson on June 16, 2012 at 5:03 pm

    Hey Michelle,  me again. Just wanted to let you know I've passed an award your way. You may not have time to get to it, but I still wanted to give you a shout out because you've got tallent and you're just an all round wonderful person! (: 

    • michelle on June 16, 2012 at 8:21 pm

      Thank you! Thank you! (((HUGS))) I'll collect it when I have more time!

  11. Julie on June 16, 2012 at 6:47 pm

    This spine-chilling tale really does pack a punch in a neat little package! I would love to read the rest of the story!

  12. michelle on June 16, 2012 at 8:22 pm

    So glad you felt the punch, Julie. Thanks for helping to keep me inspired!

  13. Sherry Ellis on June 17, 2012 at 12:35 am

    That's creepy!  I want to read more!

    • michelle on June 17, 2012 at 10:54 pm

      Glad you're creeped out! LOL!

  14. Rekha on June 17, 2012 at 6:43 am

    THat's interesting…was it for him or for her, i wonder. Well done piece, Michelle. I would love to know more.

    • michelle on June 17, 2012 at 10:57 pm

      After putting up with him for so long, I would imagine she's not going to give up so easily… that's all I'm going to say… 🙂

  15. Catherine Noble on June 17, 2012 at 8:15 am

    Wonderful, Michelle! I thought she was ill until that last paragraph, but that sinister twist really packed a punch! I want to see this bully get his comeuppance now! 🙂

    • michelle on June 17, 2012 at 10:58 pm

      Thanks Catherine. 🙂 He'll get what's coming to him…

  16. Merry Wanderer on June 17, 2012 at 12:17 pm

    Very well done, you built suspense and mystery into a very short piece.

    • michelle on June 17, 2012 at 10:59 pm

      Thank you for the visit and comment, Merry Wanderer.

  17. Sandra Crook on June 17, 2012 at 1:26 pm

    This is where the guy gets it!  Nice twist there. 

    • michelle on June 17, 2012 at 11:00 pm

      Yes, he's in for a nasty shock!

  18. Lizzie on June 17, 2012 at 9:12 pm

    I have a very bad feeling about this. . . this creepy guy(assumption) making her feel like this is creating all sorts of scenerios in my mind. . .I do need more to find out what happens!!

    • michelle on June 17, 2012 at 11:02 pm

      Your bad feeling is spot on… and there are a million different ways in which this could play out… he!he! Thanks for the visit, Lizzie!

  19. Lora on June 18, 2012 at 6:37 am

    Very mysterious. Glad he's getting his comeuppance. Obviously he deserves it.  Nice take on the prompt.

    • michelle on June 18, 2012 at 3:19 pm

      Thanks. It reminds me of the saying: What goes around, comes around… like a boomerang effect…

  20. lisashambrook on June 18, 2012 at 1:29 pm

    Yup, my skin crawled with your final sentence…hope they get all that's coming to them!

  21. michelle on June 18, 2012 at 3:23 pm

    Thanks Lisa. Your response to the piece has made my day! Remember, whatever you put out into the universe comes back to you…

  22. Rachna Chhabria on June 18, 2012 at 4:00 pm

    Hi Michelle, loved the Five sentence fiction. You managed to say so much in so few words.

    • michelle on June 18, 2012 at 7:04 pm

      Thanks Rachna!

  23. Stephanie on June 18, 2012 at 6:01 pm

    Very mysterious and creepy! I am excited to learn more! Nice work!

    • michelle on June 18, 2012 at 7:05 pm

      I'm glad the story provided some excitement, Stephanie. Thanks for popping in!

  24. Brian on June 20, 2012 at 11:32 am

    Great pacing and tone, with a perfect delivery of those last two paragraphs. Weirdly enough, it reminded me of an episode of Perry Mason I watched this weekend where a woman wants to poison her overbearing, judgmental uncle (I know — who references Perry Mason?). Anyway, great job!
     

  25. michelle on June 20, 2012 at 1:14 pm

    Thanks Brian. I promise you that Perry Mason (who is he?) didn't enter my mind when I wrote the piece. LOL.

  26. Robyn Campbell on June 27, 2012 at 7:32 pm

    Oh man! Super, Michelle. Like I said, here again is your excellent voice coming through loud and clear, my friend.  I would most definitely read on. *waves peace sign*

    • michelle on July 1, 2012 at 10:23 pm

      Thank you for the wonderful comment, Robyn! I value your concrit…  🙂

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