Five Sentence Fiction #12 – NIGHT

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week the hostess will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

Giabella pirouetted on fishnet-stockinged stiletto heels, to gaze at the scantily-clad mirror image.

Satisfied, she applied her favourite shade of ruby lipstick, checked her wristwatch and lifted a silver clutch purse from the hallway table, en-route to the front door.

Childhood-induced terrors, that even the Eminent Doctor had failed to fix, flooded her mind, as she completed the ritual.

She melted into the inky darkness.

It held new terrors for her, but SHE was in control now!


  1. Shelly on August 18, 2012 at 10:59 am

    Another bestselling piece, my dear!
    Hugs and chocolate,

  2. Medeia Sharif on August 18, 2012 at 12:26 pm

    I felt both her terror and control. Fantastic piece.

  3. Alex J. Cavanaugh on August 18, 2012 at 1:48 pm

    Sounds like she' the on who causes the terrors now!

  4. Sandra Crook on August 18, 2012 at 4:07 pm

    Not sure what she's got on her mind but it sounds like trouble for someone.  Nicely menacing.

  5. Ryan Derham on August 18, 2012 at 5:45 pm

    I’d definitely like to know more about her and her plans for the night. Well done showing her determination to overcome her lingering fear of it!

  6. Susan Kane on August 18, 2012 at 6:33 pm

    Giabella sounds like she is one dangerous, don't-mess-with-me, lady.

  7. injaynesworld on August 18, 2012 at 7:27 pm

    Wow.  Very well-drawn character.    I completely understood the demons that drove her to this need for this type of control.   Excellent piece.  

  8. Julie on August 19, 2012 at 3:18 am

    Remind me never to get on your bad side! You certainly know a thing or two about very dangerous women!  Very impressive!

  9. Carol Kilgore on August 19, 2012 at 3:01 pm

    Sets the stage nicely. Good job!

  10. Elise Fallson on August 19, 2012 at 3:10 pm

    In control and on the go! Sounds like she if finally going to have a night to remember. Great piece Mich, I could picture her perfectly. (;

  11. Wayne Assiratti on August 19, 2012 at 5:59 pm

    Loved that. Great stuff as usual!

  12. Jocelyn Rish on August 19, 2012 at 9:56 pm

    What a funky looking prompt and what a great take on it!

  13. tara tyler on August 20, 2012 at 12:30 pm

    go night woman!
    great piece!

  14. Sherry Ellis on August 20, 2012 at 1:29 pm

    I want to know what she's up to.  Now you have to write the rest of the story! 

  15. Emily R. King on August 20, 2012 at 7:18 pm

    This was a sexy piece. It lured me right in!

  16. J.L. Campbell on August 20, 2012 at 8:37 pm

    You should publish these. As always, you never cease to amaze me with a big story in a small number of words.

  17. L. Diane Wolfe on August 21, 2012 at 1:37 am

    Don't mess with her now.

  18. Lynda R Young on August 21, 2012 at 7:50 am

    oh fantastic. Love it.

  19. Andy Black on August 21, 2012 at 12:07 pm

    Are we talking Dominatrix here?…

  20. Nick Wilford on August 21, 2012 at 12:20 pm

    I like it. Very evocative, and strong characterisation in those few lines.

  21. Leigh Covington on August 21, 2012 at 3:26 pm

    I love it!

  22. michelle on August 21, 2012 at 6:51 pm


    YOU GUYS ROCK!! 🙂 🙂 🙂


  23. Britton Minor on August 22, 2012 at 1:20 pm

    I amaylaays fascinated by the ways we take control after unmanageable pain or anguish has gripped our lives. 

  24. Britton Minor on August 22, 2012 at 1:21 pm

    Criminy…that should have been, " I am always…"

  25. Rachna Chhabria on August 22, 2012 at 3:27 pm

    Wondering what terrors the inky darkness holds for her….. I am super curious Michelle. As usual great lines 🙂

  26. Mina B. on August 22, 2012 at 7:24 pm

    Oooh.  That was good.  I want to read more.  Come on!

  27. michelle on August 23, 2012 at 10:31 am

    Thanks guys! 🙂

  28. Leslie Rose on August 27, 2012 at 1:32 am

    What a fab image. Consider me hooked – no pun intended.

  29. nutschell on September 12, 2012 at 6:32 pm

    Nice! She sounds like one fierce lady 🙂

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