Five Sentence Fiction #18 – POTIONS

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week the hostess will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.



A sleek vehicle pulled up in front of the tiny shop which was the essence of ye-olde-worlde-charm, boasting a quaint exterior overhung with vines; and an expensively-clad passenger alighted from the back and proceeded along the cobble-stoned pathway, on the final phase of her journey.

The musty interior was as she had remembered it, along with the ancient and wizened man whose piercing gaze, even from a distance, hinted at a wealth of unshared knowledge, and bored right through her.

He held out a cylindrical, ring-necked glass apothecary jar which contained the concoction, removed the glass stopper and transferred the contents to a burnished receptacle.

The woman's expectant lips touched the rim of the goblet.

Tonight she would be re-born; tomorrow, she would conquer the world…


  1. JazzBumpa on October 25, 2012 at 11:11 pm

    Great expectations.

  2. Kimberly Gabriel on October 26, 2012 at 12:03 am

    Such vivid imagery in this! I loved it! I think this was my favorite "the essence of ye-olde-worlde-charm."

  3. Jemi Fraser on October 26, 2012 at 1:10 am

    Nice! I have an awesome image in my head to go with this! 🙂

  4. Alex J. Cavanaugh on October 26, 2012 at 1:17 am

    What was in that potion???

  5. Honoré on October 26, 2012 at 8:00 am

    A mysterious start of a story? Lovely post and what atmosphere! Wish to read more! 🙂

  6. Shelly on October 26, 2012 at 10:58 am

    You had some really great lines with this one.
    Hugs anc chocolate,

  7. L. Diane Wolfe on October 26, 2012 at 12:49 pm

    Now we need a potion to take away her powers.

  8. Emily R. King on October 26, 2012 at 3:25 pm

    Great character descriptions in so little words!

  9. Ryan Derham on October 26, 2012 at 4:02 pm

    Love the atmosphere and the mystery. I want to read more. Terrific imagery and description. Beautifully written, M!

  10. Sherry Ellis on October 26, 2012 at 7:07 pm

    Intriguing!  I love the use of all the senses!

  11. mary aalgaard on October 26, 2012 at 7:20 pm

    Ooo. I'm ready for chapter one!

  12. Medeia Sharif on October 26, 2012 at 9:07 pm

    Not only do you have the characters down, but in such a short piece you made the setting come alive.

  13. Wayne Assiratti on October 26, 2012 at 10:49 pm

    I'll have what she's having. 

  14. Carol Kilgore on October 27, 2012 at 12:35 am

    I love, love, love this. Great flash and would work equally well as the prologue to a novel 🙂
    Happy Weekend!

  15. Leslie Rose on October 27, 2012 at 3:15 am

    And I get that potion where?

  16. Jo-Anne Teal on October 27, 2012 at 2:09 pm

    Michelle,  detailed imagery set the scene very well :))  I think she'll regret wanting to conquer the world though!  Nicely done :))

  17. Tyrean on October 27, 2012 at 2:46 pm

    Loved the picture, really loved the story. I want to read more!!!!

  18. Rose on October 27, 2012 at 4:17 pm

    Nice! What a picture too.

  19. Robyn Campbell on October 27, 2012 at 7:42 pm

    Yikes!  What was in that concoction?! Great job, Michelle!  I saw her in my minds eye. The setting, character, etc. Wonderful flash. The picture adds to your words. *waving and smiling*

  20. Lillie McFerrin on October 28, 2012 at 2:33 am

    I love the details in this piece. This would make a wonderful opeing to a novel 🙂

  21. CC on October 28, 2012 at 2:02 pm

    I hope the outcome is what she wants  something tells me dabbling in magic to achieve success will not produce the outcome she desires. Loved this piece  

  22. Mark K on October 28, 2012 at 9:13 pm

    This, for me has all the elements of the things I like; a touch of fantasy, some suspence, potential horror and a power-hungry female lead. It put me in mind of a mix of Harry Potter, Supernatural and dare I say it, Terry Pratchett. All good. Loved it 🙂

  23. Nas on October 29, 2012 at 7:41 am

    Good imaginery and I could visualise it all through!

  24. Julie on October 29, 2012 at 8:01 am

    I agree with Carol that this would be a great "prologue for a novel!"  You do have a gift for building suspense.

  25. PK Hrezo on October 29, 2012 at 10:49 am

    Hi Michelle!
    Love it! I want to find that shop and concoct a potion of my own. 😉

  26. Al Penwasser on October 29, 2012 at 4:46 pm

    You know what they say about people with tiny fists?
    They have tiny gloves.

  27. Al Penwasser on October 29, 2012 at 4:49 pm

    All kidding aside (tough for me), this is a pretty neat concept.

  28. Mina B. on October 30, 2012 at 1:14 am

    Love it.  She will totally conquer the world!  Wonderful job!

  29. Andrew Swingler on October 31, 2012 at 3:48 pm

    More please! I'd love to know about the following day.

  30. Lisa Shambrook on November 1, 2012 at 1:35 pm

    This just begs to be continued…please!

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