WHAT IF…? Fairytale Madness Blogfest

THANK YOU TO THE FOLLOWING TEAM WHO MADE IT POSSIBLE:
 
Team Tragedy: Leigh Covington
Team Comedy: Mark Koopmans
Team Plot Twist: Cassie Mae
Team Love Story:  Morgan Shamy
 
 

Have you noticed that by changing one detail; one event, one character trait, one thought…you can completely alter the rest of the story?

For this bloghop we are exploring "What If?"
Not only do we want it to be fun, but it will hopefully be a fun writing exercise and make for some great reading during the hop!

To enter:

Think of your favorite "well known" fairytale and ask "What If…!"

Then, pick one of these four categories:

· Best Plot Twist

· Best Love Story

· Best Tragedy

· Best Comic Relief

Other Rules:

· Post your story during the week of August 13 to 17.

· Flash Fiction – 300 WORD MAX. (You don't have to tell the whole story in three hundred words. Pick what works to illustrate your point.)

                                                            

 

                                                        BLUEBEARD

“Why shouldn’t I see inside the little room? Why? Why is it forbidden?” Well, she thought about it so much that she ended up bursting with curiosity, until one day she opened the door and walked into the little room… Of all ghastly horrors! Inside, hanging on the walls were the bodies of Bluebeard’s wives: he had strangled them all with his own hands!

My story continues from this point onwards… it weighs in at approx. 178 words…

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But wait…

She heard a faint moan…

It was Catherine… what on earth was she doing here? She was barely alive!

Elizabeth breathed a sigh of relief and rushed to her side… she began to devise a plot…

Bluebeard returned from his travels.

They sat down to feast.

An eerie sound echoed through the ground floor corridor.

Bluebeard rushed to the armoury.

He gasped!

There upon the floor, lay Catherine, wife number six, the most recent victim.

Elizabeth lunged at him from behind. Catherine sprang from the floor and delivered a blow to his left cheek with a hammer.

They stripped him, gagged him, tied him up, cut off his famous beard and put it into a pouch. They dragged his unconscious body, to place it in the cramped room, alongside the corpses of his former wives, locked the door and disposed of the key.

Later, the two women stood in front of the ancient fireplace.

"What took you so long?"

"I had to wait for Bluebeard to be called away, so that I could get my hands on the keys," Elizabeth answered.

"Well… you came in the nick of time."

"Yes, all's well that ends well,"  Elizabeth smiled as she turned her back and slipped the pouch into her pocket.

Catherine thought about the wealthy king, Bluebeard's neighbour and arch enemy, who was in search of a courageous queen…

"The king will be impressed," Elizabeth emptied the powdery contents of the vial into a goblet, and handed it over to Catherine.

"The estate can be restored to our Master, and there is the matter of the handsome reward…" Catherine sighed as she placed the goblet to her lips…

54 Comments

  1. Alex J. Cavanaugh on August 13, 2012 at 7:15 pm

    He got his!

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:44 pm

      He got what was coming to him! A "prolonged"  taste of his own medicine… 🙂

  2. Leigh Covington on August 13, 2012 at 7:55 pm

    Yes! I agree wtih Alex!
    And those are two tough chicks! I love it!

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:45 pm

      Thanks Leigh. I loved your "NOT so happily ever after" with an ankle 'twist' Cinder story… classic!

  3. Carol Kilgore on August 13, 2012 at 8:09 pm

    Oh, very good 🙂

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:46 pm

      Thanks Carol!! 🙂

  4. D. D. Falvo on August 13, 2012 at 8:16 pm

    Eeee! Just desserts and wicked Elizabeth, lol. A delicious twist and fun plot. I got shivers. Well done.

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:48 pm

      Reminds me of  "every dog has his day"… Your story was brilliant! It had all the ingredients for a winner – including a moral! Thanks for the visit and comment!

  5. Miranda Hardy on August 13, 2012 at 9:10 pm

    Eerie! I love it. Very entertaining and imaginative. 

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:48 pm

      Thanks Miranda… 🙂

  6. Emily R. King on August 13, 2012 at 9:11 pm

    Serves him right! Nice job!

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:49 pm

      Yep, it sure does. What goes around, comes around… and all that jazz… thanks!

  7. Suzi on August 13, 2012 at 11:18 pm

    I've heard of Bluebeard, but am not familiar with the story. I'll have to go check it out. I like these ladies!

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:51 pm

      Suzi, I loved your empowered and bilingual… or is it multi-lingual Cinderella! A Latin pre-nup? Now that was a great twist… 🙂

  8. Medeia Sharif on August 14, 2012 at 1:50 am

    Elizabeth seems unstoppable. Great piece.

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:54 pm

      Thanks Medeia. Your Rumpelstiltskin with the father-daughter hustler combination was a great read… very entertaining! 🙂

  9. Tracy on August 14, 2012 at 3:20 am

    Love the girl power!
     
    <a href=http://a2zmommy.blogspot.com/>A2Z Mommy and What’s In Between</a>

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 4:56 pm

      Ah, I remember your Little Red Hen tale. Definitely a case of "be careful what you wish for…" Thanks for the visit Tracy! 🙂

  10. Cecilia Robert on August 14, 2012 at 4:31 pm

    he had that one coming! love the girl power. ..:D  Great twist. 🙂

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 8:17 pm

      Thanks Cece. Between Beauty & The Beast, I'm wondering who got to the mayor first! *chuckles* My money is on Beauty! 🙂 I loved your version of the tale! Great stuff.

  11. Elise Fallson on August 14, 2012 at 5:13 pm

    This was so fun, I was cheering internally as I  read along! (:
    *raises goblet*, cheers! Love it! (:

    • michelle on August 14, 2012 at 8:26 pm

      Girl Power all the way! The murderous bully got his just desserts! he!he!

  12. J. A. Bennett on August 14, 2012 at 11:34 pm

    That wicked Elizabeth taking everything for herself! lol, great story!

    • michelle on August 15, 2012 at 6:00 pm

      I was really caught up in your bittersweet Aladdin & Genie love story… wonderful writing! Thanks J.A.

  13. Sherry Ellis on August 15, 2012 at 12:17 am

    Clever women!  I'm glad Bluebeard got what he deserved.

    • michelle on August 15, 2012 at 6:00 pm

      I'll second that! 🙂 Hope that Schultz is behaving himself… that dog is something else…

  14. Carolyn Brown on August 15, 2012 at 11:40 am

    Really great piece and Bluebeard got what he deserved!

    • michelle on August 15, 2012 at 6:01 pm

      Thanks Carolyn!

  15. tara tyler on August 15, 2012 at 12:41 pm

    love a smart, devious wench! nice job!

    • michelle on August 15, 2012 at 6:02 pm

      I must say that your fun-loving, adventurous ninja piggies are not to be messed with… they were SO adorable! I really enjoyed your tale!

  16. Mina B. on August 16, 2012 at 12:55 am

    Love it when the chicks are bad a**.  Well done!

    • michelle on August 16, 2012 at 8:19 am

      Bad a** to the core… he!he!  And I loved your smart and savvy Ella! Way to go!

  17. Cortney Pearson on August 16, 2012 at 2:17 am

    Interesting! I love their conspiracy, and that he definitely got what he deserved, lol! Nicely done.

    • michelle on August 16, 2012 at 8:26 am

      Thanks Cortney! The double twist you added to the Sleeping Beauty tale was totally unexpected…  really packed a punch at the end! Great job!

  18. Lynda R Young on August 16, 2012 at 6:46 am

    This is a much better ending! hehehe

    • michelle on August 16, 2012 at 8:27 am

      Thanks Lynda! Though I think I've chosen an obscure fairytale – not everybody is familiar with Bluebeard… 🙂

  19. Julie on August 16, 2012 at 9:03 am

    You've really outdone yourself again Michelle! I always enjoy reading your imaginative stories with a twist!

    • michelle on August 16, 2012 at 9:03 pm

      Thanks Julie. I hope you've followed up on your reality show concept… it's brilliant! Start writing the script…

  20. Rekha on August 16, 2012 at 2:16 pm

    What was in the vial, Michelle?….Smart chicks and brave to boot. Enjoyed this fast action sequence. 🙂

    • michelle on August 16, 2012 at 9:05 pm

      It contains a concoction designed to make sure that Catherine never wakes up…  🙂

  21. The Golden Eagle on August 16, 2012 at 7:13 pm

    Great twist ending. Elizabeth is more than she first appears!

    • michelle on August 16, 2012 at 9:06 pm

      Appearances can be deceptive… 🙂 Thanks G.E.

  22. Cathy Keaton on August 16, 2012 at 9:33 pm

    Tough chick that takes care of business! Love that.
    Thanks for stopping by my blog and reading my flash fic entry. I appreciate it. 😉

  23. michelle on August 16, 2012 at 10:25 pm

    Welcome to my place, Cathy. I loved your "Lucinderella " spin on the popular tale. It was realistic.:)

  24. Denise Covey on August 17, 2012 at 8:52 am

    Great entry. He got his in the end!

    • michelle on August 18, 2012 at 7:51 am

      Your feisty and rebellious Cinderella would go down well with the modern reader. Thanks for the visit and comment, Denise.

  25. Madeleine on August 17, 2012 at 6:22 pm

    Fun twist and theme. Nothing worse than a group of women scorned!
    I like the touch at the end with the vial of polyjuice type potion with Blubeard's beard.

    • michelle on August 18, 2012 at 7:53 am

      I enjoyed your Cinders Fella… and the "three lumpy mattresses" image is etched on my mind! *chuckles* Thanks for the visit.

  26. Nick Wilford on August 18, 2012 at 11:21 pm

    That was awesome. Loved the twist at the end! 

  27. michelle on August 19, 2012 at 9:55 am

    Your "poisonous porridge" version of Goldilocks was very stylish, Nick! I especially liked the blame-it-on-the-bears feeling that came through in the tale.

  28. Catherine Noble on August 19, 2012 at 5:29 pm

    Loved the devious set up! I hope Bluebeard had a good long think about his actions, locked up with all those corpses haha *shudder* 🙂

  29. michelle on August 19, 2012 at 8:38 pm

    Yes, a taste of his own medicine… but a hundred times worse… ha!ha! 🙂

  30. Cassie Mae on August 20, 2012 at 3:43 am

    Echoing everyone else here with a 'Karma's a beast!' Lol. Great job!

  31. michelle on August 20, 2012 at 7:16 am

    Yes… what goes around, comes around… thanks Cassie Mae!

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