The Edge Of Fear…

By Michelle Wallace | October 21, 2011 |

This challenge is from Write On Edge.

This week, we invited you to compose a text–160 characters–that would either elicit or express fear.

I've chosen the concluding line taken from one of my flash fiction pieces. It weighs in at about 91 characters.

Seems like he's lost it. The glinting object thrust before his eyes shattered the remnants of his rational mind.

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NotJustAnotherJennifer on October 21, 2011 at 9:59 pm

Oooh, intriguing!

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Galit Breen on October 21, 2011 at 10:00 pm

Ooh I love words like glinting and shattered and remnants. Spooky, indeed!

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angela on October 22, 2011 at 12:18 am

Glinting is a word that just sounds like metal against glass to me. This was really powerful.

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Amanda on October 22, 2011 at 12:33 am

love the sounds in my head when i read this!

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shelly on October 22, 2011 at 1:09 am

Did this character go insane?

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julie moore on October 22, 2011 at 1:31 am

Very interesting. Yes I like the word glinting also.

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- mish on October 22, 2011 at 2:31 pm
  
  THANKS TO ALL YOU WONDERFUL LADIES FOR POPPING IN FROM WRITE ON EDGE WEEKEND LINKY ! 🙂 🙂
  
  @ NJA JEN ~ thanks a mil!
  @ Galit ~ spooky, and wide open to ‘fear-related’ details… thanks!
  @ Angela ~ nice combo… metal & glass… you’ve just given me an idea… thanks!
  @ Amanda ~ glad it’s lodged in your headspace… thanks!
  @ Shelly ~ yes, completely “off his rocker”… thanks!
  @ Julie ~ for me, glinting has a visual and aural appeal… thanks!
  
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Amy@souldipper on October 22, 2011 at 5:42 pm

So few words, such great suspense. Well done.

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- mish on October 22, 2011 at 5:59 pm
  
  Thanks for popping in and leaving a comment.
  
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Alex J. Cavanaugh on October 22, 2011 at 6:33 pm

That's good!

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Nancy C on October 22, 2011 at 8:42 pm

Love the active verbs "shatter" and "thrust."

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- mish on October 22, 2011 at 9:12 pm
  
  Thanks Nancy. I have learned that active verbs are ‘in-the-moment’ … give a wonderful sense of immediacy.
  
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Anastasia on October 31, 2011 at 6:39 am

Great scary line.

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