FOURTH CAMPAIGN: Challenge no. #1

This is the first challenge for the campaign. Here are the instructions from Rachael's post.

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count.

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:

  • end the story with the words: "everything faded." (also included in the word count) – check
  • include the word "orange" in the story – check
  • write in the same genre you normally write – check
  • make your story 200 words exactly! – check

Feel free to use the picture to inspire you, or else see how whacky, creative, and original you can get 🙂
 

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Shadows crept across the wall as the light faded, showcasing a canvas splashed in shades of orange-red-gold.

Inside the bungalow were two occupants. They could hear the nearby sea as the tide rushed in, competing with the distant music of the jungle night.

An uneasy quiet lingered…

"Where to from here?" She was always direct.

His face revealed nothing. "It's probably too late…" a convenient sigh, as if on cue.

The bastard. What a nerve, thinking it was that simple. "This moment is long overdue…"

Next to the remnants of a half-eaten dinner, the candle flickered.

Outside, the heartbeat of the jungle came to life. It was a living, breathing, pulsating creature; a raw and primitive cacophony of weird sounds that combined to create a unique and sensual rhythm.

"What do you want me to say?" He was seldom disagreeable, typical Mr. Quiet.

The sounds intensified… reached a swelling crescendo…

"Something? Anything! Curse! Swear!" She shrugged.

He smiled, the true master of verbal diplomacy.

The tiny microphone pressed softly against her shoulder blade…

The cacophony reached fever pitch… they could feel it obliterate all rational thought… there was no escaping its power…

A single scream pierced the night…

…everything faded.

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46 Comments

  1. Jessica on February 23, 2012 at 3:27 pm

    Ooh very creepy! I wish we knew more of the story! It makes me want to read more! Great job 🙂
    I'm entry #19

    • mish on February 23, 2012 at 6:39 pm

      Thanks sweetie-pie! 🙂 For a 15 year old, you sure are an amazing writer.

  2. Miranda Hardy on February 23, 2012 at 3:27 pm

    Very intriguing story. Good job.

    • mish on February 23, 2012 at 6:40 pm

      Intrigue is the ‘name of the game’… glad it worked!

  3. Tia Bach on February 23, 2012 at 4:20 pm

    I like it. You kept me on the hook, not knowing where you were going to go with it. I love that. Great job! (and thanks for visiting mine).

    • Akoss on February 23, 2012 at 4:50 pm

      I'm intrigued by "Mr. Quiet" what exactly is he up to? I wonder.
      I loved your setting too. 🙂

      • mish on February 23, 2012 at 6:43 pm

        In this situation, it supports the theory of “still waters run deep” 🙂

    • mish on February 23, 2012 at 6:41 pm

      Yay! Mission accomplished. Thanks for your generous comments. Much appreciated! 🙂

  4. Rek on February 23, 2012 at 5:37 pm

    Very well written…started in a slow peaceful manner and then brought in the subtle tension. Enjoyable even as it leaves more questions than answers.

    • mish on February 23, 2012 at 6:58 pm

      Thank you! Don’t want to give too much away… got to leave the reader wanting more…

  5. Susan Rocan on February 23, 2012 at 6:08 pm

    Talk about leaving us hanging! The suspense was well done and the imagery brought the scene to life. Good work!

    • mish on February 23, 2012 at 6:59 pm

      The cliffhanger works every time! Thanks for popping in.

  6. Murees Dupé on February 23, 2012 at 6:15 pm

    That was great. I wanted to read more. Well done!

    • mish on February 23, 2012 at 7:00 pm

      Thanks Murees, glad you enjoyed it!

  7. Gwen on February 23, 2012 at 7:20 pm

    I love your descrptions of the jungle in here.
     
    #109

    • mish on February 23, 2012 at 7:31 pm

      Thanks Gwen. 🙂

  8. Arlee Bird on February 24, 2012 at 5:34 am

    What is it?  This is a real mystery.  Good setting.
     
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  9. mish on February 24, 2012 at 10:44 am

    Thanks Lee 🙂

  10. Diane D. Gillette on February 24, 2012 at 1:47 pm

    Oooh, interesting!  I'm not quite sure what's going on, but I definitely want to keep reading!

    • mish on February 24, 2012 at 8:53 pm

      So glad to have captured your attention… thanks for the kind comments!

  11. Ann Cory on February 24, 2012 at 3:00 pm

    Well written and intriguing – I want to read more 🙂 Nice job!

    • mish on February 25, 2012 at 4:23 pm

      Thanks Ann! 🙂

  12. Michelle on February 24, 2012 at 3:17 pm

    Oh, nice!  i want to know more.  I loved the description of the jungle. 
    Excellent job.
     
    Sorry I was so late posting.
    Michelle 🙂

    • mish on February 24, 2012 at 8:58 pm

      Welcome to my place, Michelle! You know what they say… better late than never! 🙂

  13. nutschell on February 24, 2012 at 8:53 pm

    you are rocking these challenges, mish! great job!

    • mish on February 25, 2012 at 8:44 am

      Just giving it my best shot! Thanks!

  14. Sarah Pearson on February 25, 2012 at 1:11 am

    Noooo … you can't leave us hanging! 

  15. mish on February 25, 2012 at 8:45 am

    He he he! Just did… 🙂

  16. Ashley Nixon on February 25, 2012 at 7:08 pm

    Mr. Quiets are always infuriating. I'm dating one. LOL. LOVED your descriptions!! They were amazing. Well, the whole thing was. 

    • mish on February 25, 2012 at 7:50 pm

      Thanks for your generous comments! I appreciate it. Good luck with your "Mr. Quiet" LOL!

  17. Elise Fallson on February 25, 2012 at 8:28 pm

    Love your imagery! Had me hooked all the way to the end, just wish it was longer. (;

    • mish on February 25, 2012 at 8:54 pm

      I’m thrilled that you were hooked all the way to the end! Thanks for popping in, Elise.

  18. Stacey Mitchell on February 25, 2012 at 9:57 pm

    Can't believe it's taken me so long to get around to reading your entry but ooh it's intriguing! Loved the imagery too 🙂

    • mish on February 25, 2012 at 10:14 pm

      That's okay… there are lots of entries to read, so it's understandable… 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it!

  19. Misha on February 27, 2012 at 4:52 am

    Interesting. Wonder what happened. 😀

    • mish on February 27, 2012 at 12:53 pm

      That's the million-dollar question – what happened? 🙂 We'll know the answer to that when the plot unravels…

  20. Sangu on February 27, 2012 at 3:03 pm

    Ooooh this was so creepy! Well done!
    Thanks for your lovely comment on my blog 🙂

  21. mish on February 27, 2012 at 7:31 pm

    Thanks for the visit, Sangu 🙂

  22. Jennifer McMurrain on February 27, 2012 at 9:44 pm

    Wow that was really intense and quite the cliffhanger. Really enjoyed it.

    • mish on February 28, 2012 at 7:19 am

      You can't beat the cliffhanger moments… glad you enjoyed it, thanks.

  23. Jocelyn Rish on March 1, 2012 at 9:07 pm

    This one has some really excellent imagery!

    • mish on March 1, 2012 at 9:40 pm

      Thanks Jocelyn! 🙂

  24. Traci Kenworth on March 2, 2012 at 6:07 pm

    Very freaky. Good job.

    • mish on March 2, 2012 at 6:31 pm

      Freaky… okay, that's a new one for me… I like the sound of freaky! 🙂

  25. C.M. Brown on March 3, 2012 at 5:15 am

    Loved i! Great imagery! I would like to find out what IT was?

  26. mish on March 3, 2012 at 5:53 am

    Thanks for popping in! 🙂

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