Letting Go Bloghop

Today is the Letting Go Bloghop, hosted by Kyra Lennon. For more info and to check out all the participants, go here.

Rules: the participants are invited to share some stories about letting go. Was there a time when you had to let go of someone or something? How did it make you feel? How did you handle it? Or if that's too personal – which I completely understand – how about writing a piece of flash fiction? 

The only rules are – obviously – it has to be related to letting go, and please keep it to a maximum of 500 words.
 
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I've written a flash fiction piece which weighs in at approximately 255 words. Enjoy.

                                                                    

 
 
 
 
 
 

Roz Summers let go, for just one minute.

A bad decision.

But that's all it took.

One minute.

Screeching tyres. The little girl disappeared beneath the bumper of a 4X4, with an ear-shredding scream. She was alive. Barely. Disjointed words lingered in Roz's mind. Stabilised vital signs. ICU became a second home. Life settled into a blur.

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Lacey Summers had to let go.

She had no choice.

The tiny lips on the 5-year old pixie face quivered between moments of confidence and terror, eyes wide and imploring… At the end, it had been too much for the little body. She had let go… just closed her eyes… drifted off and never returned.

The mother adopted a two-worded, get-out-of-bed-in-the-morning-mantra. Hang on… hang on… hang on. She hung onto the image of the pixie face lying on the pillow. It kept her going from second to second.

The days passed.

Eventually, summer turned to autumn, the days grew cooler and shorter… the two-worded mantra grew weaker and weaker…

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Roz Summers had to let go.

AGAIN.

Doctors said there was nothing more they could do. There was no hope of recovery. She had to pull the plug. Move forward. Pick up the pieces. Move on with her life.

Inside the hospital room, a solitary tear rolled down her face as an intense emptiness seeped into the lonely spaces of her existence… and settled there.

Outside, a single pink helium balloon rose into the air… it soared higher and higher… until it became a distant speck in the azure sky.

56 Comments

  1. Jennifer S. Pitts on October 22, 2012 at 8:24 am

    Great imagery and something, as a mom, I never want to face.
     

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:32 am

      I agree… this is a mother's-worse-nightmare-come-true!

  2. Kyra Lennon on October 22, 2012 at 9:43 am

    Ooh, for a short story, that really clawed at my insides! Great work!
     
    Thank you very much for being part of the bloghop! 😀

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:33 am

      Thank you for hosting this wonderful blog hop. I really enjoyed it! 🙂 And good luck with the novella!

  3. Alex J. Cavanaugh on October 22, 2012 at 12:12 pm

    Oh, that is so sad!

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:34 am

      🙁 🙁  What can I say? Thanks Alex!

  4. L. Diane Wolfe on October 22, 2012 at 1:34 pm

    That is so moving and powerful.

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:35 am

      Thanks for the visit and comment L.Diane!

  5. Sally on October 22, 2012 at 1:42 pm

    Very powerful, it had me gulping.

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:43 am

      Thank you Sally! I'm glad you were affected in that manner.

  6. Elise Fallson on October 22, 2012 at 10:36 pm

    Powerful entry Mich. This is twice now I've cried reading these entries.
     
     

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:45 am

      I'm just thinking that this bloghop should have included a warning: box of tissues compulsory when reading the entries… or something to that effect… I've read some really intense and moving entries!

  7. Mary on October 22, 2012 at 11:10 pm

    That made me teary. Nicely written story.

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:46 am

      Thanks Mary! Glad you enjoyed it.

  8. Jaycee DeLorenzo on October 23, 2012 at 12:21 am

    Very sad and powerful.  Thanks for sharing.  😀

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:50 am

      Thanks Jaycee. 🙂

  9. Trisha on October 23, 2012 at 6:24 am

    Talk about tragedy!! yikes.
    Recently I went to a wake where we released pink balloons, so this reminded me of that.
    Sad story 🙁 But very well written!

  10. michelle on October 23, 2012 at 6:54 am

    Thanks Trisha. I really enjoyed your  "first-car" letting-go poem. Very refreshing. And original too 🙂

  11. Julie on October 23, 2012 at 7:31 am

    Deeply moving and painfully realistic. What an emotionally charged ending!

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 7:43 am

      I'm gad you were moved by the piece, Julie.  Yes, this could be a snippet from a real-life situation… but it IS fictional. 🙂

  12. mary aalgaard on October 23, 2012 at 12:26 pm

    You are able to evoke emotion in a few short words. That's a gift. The story is sad.

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 12:46 pm

      Thank you for the wonderful and inspiring comment, Mary! I really appreciate it. 🙂

  13. Suzanne Furness on October 23, 2012 at 1:38 pm

    Heart wrenching story 🙂

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 2:18 pm

      Thanks Suzanne. I enjoyed your poignant semi-fictional/semi-factual story! 🙂

  14. Sherry Ellis on October 23, 2012 at 5:54 pm

    This is so powerful!  It made me want to cry!

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 8:09 pm

      Ah, thanks Sherry!

  15. Nas on October 23, 2012 at 7:52 pm

    Oh, so sad! Nicely written, I could visualise and it made me teary.

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 8:11 pm

      Thank you Nas… if the reader is moved by my piece, it gives me the satisfaction of knowing that my job has been done!

  16. A.J. Locke on October 23, 2012 at 9:23 pm

    I love how the piece is not incredibly detailed but still manages to convey strong emotion. Very sad!

    • michelle on October 23, 2012 at 10:02 pm

      Thanks A.J. I enjoyed your evocative "lunar-inspired" poem. It was full of longing… 🙂

  17. Medeia Sharif on October 23, 2012 at 10:59 pm

    This was a powerful piece. I felt all the emotions. 

    • michelle on October 24, 2012 at 1:29 pm

      Thanks Medeia. I enjoyed your letting-go poem. It was full of great imagery! And I think only about 3 bloggers wrote poems for this bloghop.

  18. S.P.Bowers on October 23, 2012 at 11:28 pm

    chilling. 
     
    Letting go, in any way, is one of the hardest things in life. 

    • michelle on October 24, 2012 at 1:36 pm

      Yes, letting go is difficult, especially in the above scenario…    🙂 but there are instances when we NEED to let go and embrace something new, but are afraid to do so, because we are trapped in a "comfort zone" and too afraid to venture into the unknown… thanks Sara.

  19. Christine Rains on October 24, 2012 at 1:42 am

    Wonderfully written and so sad.

    • michelle on October 24, 2012 at 1:40 pm

      Thanks Christine. I can remember your factual piece because it touched on the subject of patriotism… 🙂

  20. Jackie F. on October 24, 2012 at 2:41 am

    Beautiful! The detailed images were amazing.

    • michelle on October 24, 2012 at 1:45 pm

      Ah, the lady who featured orchids in her letting-go scenario… thank you Jackie!

  21. Carolyn Brown on October 24, 2012 at 10:12 am

    How sad and you have presented it in such powerful way!

    • michelle on October 24, 2012 at 1:51 pm

      Thank you Carolyn. I must say that I admire you for sharing a personal story with your readers for this bloghop… 🙂 I don't know if I would be as brave as you…

  22. Carol Kilgore on October 24, 2012 at 2:17 pm

    WOW!

  23. michelle on October 24, 2012 at 2:25 pm

    🙂 I love your wow… it speaks volumes…

  24. Lynne Schmidt on October 24, 2012 at 4:23 pm

    Wow. I was blown away by this. Well done. Thank you for sharing this piece. 

    • michelle on October 24, 2012 at 6:20 pm

      Thanks Lynne. Your piece was very intense… very personal… and heart-wrenching too.

  25. Tonja on October 24, 2012 at 5:11 pm

    Oh, that was sad and very well written.

    • michelle on October 24, 2012 at 6:21 pm

      Thanks Tonja!

  26. Nick Wilford on October 24, 2012 at 8:00 pm

    A devastating piece, which you handled with aplomb. Stopped me in my tracks. Well done.

    • michelle on October 24, 2012 at 8:27 pm

      Nick, thank you for the generous comment, it put a huge smile on my face! 🙂

  27. Melissa Maygrove on October 24, 2012 at 11:02 pm

    Wow. Powerful piece.
    Good job! 🙂

  28. Kelley Lynn on October 25, 2012 at 4:18 am

    Wow. Super powerful. Very well done!

    • michelle on October 25, 2012 at 9:39 pm

      Thanks Kelley Lynn!! Thanks for popping in.

  29. michelle on October 25, 2012 at 9:35 pm

    Thanks Melissa! 🙂

  30. Debra Elliott on October 26, 2012 at 11:29 am

    Powerful. Thank you for stopping by my blog and your comment. It is still painful to write about.

  31. michelle on October 26, 2012 at 12:43 pm

    Thanks Debra. Letting go of a parent/child has to be the most painful type of letting-go…

  32. joylene on October 26, 2012 at 3:16 pm

    This looked lik fun and a little inspiring. I'm going to try to join in next time. Thanks, Michelle.

  33. michelle on October 26, 2012 at 3:35 pm

    Joylene, these flash fic challenges/bloghops are the ideal way to keep the creativity flowing, when you take a break from the WIP… 🙂 You should try them from time to time…

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