DRABBLE CHALLENGE ~ WHAT IF ?

           Ten years of emptiness , of torture , of wondering , what if ?

What if she had been firmer , harder , stood her ground , refused to budge ? What if the father had intervened , refused to let the boy go ? Ten years of what ifs crowded her heart and soul . "What if , what if," whispered and nudged , played havoc with her mind .

The urge to end it all was a patient bystander in this private war , waiting , anticipating , fuelled by the what-if demons threatening to consume her . It would be so easy to leave … escape … find a place with no voices … a haven …

What if … 

8 Comments

  1. Amy LaBonte on September 14, 2011 at 6:05 pm

    What happened with the boy? Her?

    • mish on September 14, 2011 at 7:16 pm

      The boy didn’t return … there was an accident … 🙁

  2. tara tyler on September 14, 2011 at 8:39 pm

    wonderful piece!
    feels like a juncture, a time to choose!

    • mish on September 14, 2011 at 9:34 pm

      Thanks Tara ! Yes , that is the general idea and mood …

  3. Ryan on September 15, 2011 at 6:56 pm

    "What ifs" can certainly be destructive. Her pain really comes across well, Mish. Great work…as always! I was thinking she may have given the child up for adoption and that's haunted her all these years. 

    • mish on September 15, 2011 at 8:33 pm

      That’s an interesting thought … it can be interpreted in so many ways … thanks R ! 🙂

  4. Isadora on September 22, 2011 at 10:07 am

    The painful "What If's?" that so many of us have in life. This exudes
    pain and suffering. A very intense write.
    Isadora
     

    • mish on September 22, 2011 at 12:52 pm

      Thanks Izzy . I’m sure that every individual can identify with the piece … fill in his/her own story in the blank places …
      Pain/suffering is a universal theme which brings us together … 🙂

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