Write…Edit…Publish: Thriller – October 2022 #WEPFF
Welcome to the Write…Edit…Publish blog hop. The theme for this October edition is – Thriller.
The prompt is based on Thriller, released in the early ’80s, an unofficial anthem for Halloween and horror. Both singer and song are music industry icons. Thriller has sold 70 million+ copies worldwide, and Michael Jackson, known as the King of Pop, is one of the controversial and
culturally significant figures of the 20th century. He is credited with some landmark music and reinventing complex dance moves like the moonwalk to make it his own signature. Like the Beatles, MJ was, during his lifetime and remains, more than a decade after his death, one of the best-selling artists of all time. He has left a massive and unique thumbprint on the music/entertainment scene of the late twentieth century.
So I decided to experiment with this playful flash prompt which comes from Kathy Fish: The Art Of Flash Fiction.
Write the same ONE paragraph story THREE TIMES. Keep repeating the same elements, but change something in each version that takes the story in a new direction. See how this changes the overall arc from the first to the last section. See how you can create a sense of movement and rising tension simply by moving things around.
Try using echoes. Repeat images, words, or lines of dialogue.
My flash fiction is 415 words.
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Hi Michelle! Great that you got your entry in. What a fascinating idea to tell and retell your story in this structure. I loved your descriptions – ‘cigarette dangling from wind-bitten lips’. Grabbed me right away. Especially loved the echoes. The streetlights.
Thanks for submitting your intriguing story to the WEP Thriller prompt.
Interesting and decidedly eerie. Perspective is everything, and a shift opens up new vistas. Well done.
I thought this was very cool. I enjoyed the changes in perspective.
You’ve created a great atmosphere in the piece. It’s an interesting technique – I’m not sure I could pull it off 🙂
Greatly effective – is what I think. The three section made fascinating reading, Michelle. Subtle and suspenseful and intriguing. Brilliant take on both the prompts. Thanks for a wonderful read.
I like this technique of wringing out more of the story using different perspectives. Your lyrical language paints the eerie setting. You are a storyteller!!
Truly atmospheric. I’ll have to give the method a try. Great for a Halloween tale.
Happy Halloween, Michelle.
How interesting. This re-telling technique makes for a greater depth in a story. Your ‘scare’ level also bumps up with every iteration.
Hi Michelle
Wow, what an interesting and clever way to write a story. Too much repetition can be fatal to a story but in this case the echoing, along with the subtle changes in each paragraph, increased the tension, held my attention and made me want to move on and read more. Your descriptions are great. This piece works well for the Thriller prompt. Well done.
Hi Michelle – I loved this and your take x 3 … very effective story telling. Your use of words have created a distinctly Third Man storyline – it’s wonderful – I hope you can do lots more of these. Very atmospheric … clever – cheers Hilary
This is a fascinating way to approach writing flash fiction. The changes in perspective were effective, and your writing here is atompspheric and chilling. Well done!
Hi,
I think you did an excellent job. I was engaged until the very last word.
Awesome!
Shalom aleichem
An interesting technique. I think it was the flickering street lamp that upped the intrigue. 🤔
I really liked how it changed in each writing. The third one was my favorite. Crisp and tight. Just enough details to provide image, then the surprise at the end.